In the afternoon we had a one to one meeting with Mike and Dave to discuss the progress of the film so far. Again, this was very helpful as they identified the weak areas and the parts that needed developing. The main issue was to do with the patients actions during the ordeal. It was clear that I have the beginning, middle and end sorted, as well as Jeds wild anticsthroughout. However the patient has always been less thought out - often described as just getting worse, trying desperately to get attention, gradually dying. This was not clear enough, and as Dave said - was crying out for more humour.
Dave got me to think about all the different things he could be doing to try and get Jeds attention throughout the film, ranging from the civilised waving to the more extreme throwing of objects. We decided to have a think about how his attempts could get worse, and help build to the climax without distracting from the main punchline. I listed a number of different gags with the team:
- Frantically waving
- Throwing fruit/paper aeroplane
- Wheeling his bed across the room - only for Jed to knock it back during a dance
- Lasooing his wires
- Waving in a mirror reflection - only for Jed to notice the mirror.... and adjust his hair
- Stretching out only to be notcied and recieve a high five from Jed
- Screaming/changing colour
- Music to silence cuts
- Silent screams
I dont want the film to turn into a slapstick joke after joke thing, so I am going to stick with the more subtle attempts, which gradually get more ambitious. Below is the quick notes I made during the meeting.
I also made the big decision to give Ed a broken leg, as it will prevent him from leaving the bed and constrain his attempts to the less ridiculous. I also began listing objects needed to be modelled for the ward.
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